My name is Fia and I love mpreg.

Okay, a clause to that statement. I love mpreg in fandoms that can accommodate it, through use of magic, alien technologies, unique species quirks or wacky matriarchal parallel universes.

But when you're writing an otherwise 'normal' human pregnancy, notable only in that it is taking place in a male body due to one of the previous kinds of meddling (or something else I haven't listed that can be believed in the context of the fandom) please do a little research into what is 'normal' development in a human pregnancy.

I found out fairly easily, by asking my pregnant best friend, that a normal human fetus first shows signs of movement at 16-25 weeks, which is admittedly quite a wide range. If you don't have one of those at your disposal, you could also check with Wiki or possibly Google "stages of human fetal development" or similar. I'm just saying that your guy's baby probably isn't going to be flailing fit to freak out the physician at three months, is all.

It was a cute fic, for the most part, despite the author retconning some fairly important (I felt) character development (though it's possible the author has not seen the episode in question, which I doubt because they included spoilers for it in the story, complete with very specific spoiler warning.) It's not unusual; sadly most writers in this fandom tend to favor character stagnation over emotional growth in regards to this particular character. Also, I'm still trying to wrap my head around the phrase "more than harmless," meaning -- in context -- "potentially healthful."

In summation, another fairly good story by a good writer, which could have been great. Disappointing. (Also makes me wonder if I'm some kind of a freak for looking things up and asking questions when I'm not an expert -- which is most of the time -- and striving for accuracy whenever possible. I'm actually pretty easy; I would even have accepted a reason -- perhaps something hormonal -- why the baby was roughly a month ahead of itself developmentally.)

 

Dear Author, 

Cornelius Fudge has many failings as a person.

( Here are a few of them. )

However, even with these character flaws it stretches the imagination pantyhose-thin to accept that Cornelius Fudge would connive with Vernon Dursley to enslave, exploit, and sexually abuse Harry Potter for eleven years while keeping up the pretense that he froze on the doorstep of Number 4 Privet Drive on the night Dumbledore left him there.

( And that is only PART of the reason why I want to douse your fic with kerosene! )

(cross posted to own journal)

Rant the First: I'm beginning to really, really dislike the phrase "if you don't like, don't read!" This is possibly because I'm mostly being told this by fanbrats as a response to my negative critiques/comments/reviews.

It could also be because the phrase...doesn't actually make the sense the writer intends. For instance, I know that if I use the phrase (which I didn't past my first few stories) it means "if you don't like [genre], then don't read [genre]." But when other writers (especially a poor one, or a popular one whose skill isn't all that great) uses the phrase, what they mean is "if you don't like [my writing] don't read [my writing] (and don't tell me about it!)" This is very frustrating, especially when the writer is requesting reviews/critique/comments. Because they're lying.

Rant the Second: So, there is this one fic and from the first chapter onward, there is a Sue who has essentially been inserted into the plot, completely replacing the actual canon character. And it's fairly obvious the reason the character was replaced was because she wanted there to be a romance between her Sue and the canon villain. (It's pretty much stated in the summary that there's going to be a romance between her Sue and the villain.)

People called her on it, and she tried at first to defend the Sue, stating that the Sue had "real emotional problems," and therefore was a full fledged, well rounded character. I point out to her that her Sue was in fact a Sue and would remain a Sue because of her Sue-like qualities such as the ability to make everyone act OOC and all the loving descriptions of her perfection, and the fact that she's replacing the character who was supposed to be there and wasn't. The writer decided to be unusually honest and stated that she didn't care if she was writing a Sue, but the second thing she wrote back seriously annoyed the heck out of me.

She stated that she LIKED the character who had been replaced by her Sue. To me, this makes no sense. Why would you completely remove the canon character from the fic and put your own in his place if you liked him? If I like a character, I write about him/her. If I don't like a character (or if I like a character and know I can't do him/her justice) he/she doesn't show up, or at most gets a cameo.

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 I've lost everything: my job, my future, everything people *think* is important, but I don't care - because even if I have to dig ditches for the rest of my life, I shall be a ditch-digger who once had a wonderful day.
~  Cornelius Hackl - Hello Dolly

“When we find ourselves unsure about whether or not to continue a particular approach, it’s useful to ask, “If I were just arriving on the scene and were given the choice to either jump into this project as it stands now or pass on it, would I choose to jump in?” If the answer is no, then chances are we’ve been swayed by the hidden force of commitment. Making a clean break might feel uncomfortable, but it could be in our best interest.”

Sway: The Irresistible Pull of Irrational Behavior by Ori and Rom Brafman

"You know you're amazing, right?"

Me: ...?

"Seriously. You know exactly what's wrong with your life and you know exactly what needs to be changed. You don't just sit around and wait for things to get worse. You fix it. That's amazing Mel. You're the only one of my friends who actually takes care of herself."

Me: **all smiles and giggles**

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'...no matter how hard he scrubs at himself, he cannot rid his body of the earthy, forest scent...'

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Attention One Piece Fans!

Zoro's name is NOT ZOLO.

That is all.

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Kakashi had come home with Brook and Showered.

If I read this I have the idea that you have two OCs named "Brook" and "Showered" and not that Kakashi had a shower.

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